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Offline CMF

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Re: Any poets here?
« Reply #15 on: July 13, 2011, 06:12:53 PM »
Smokes, judging by this poem alone, your son has the dangerous potential of becoming a poet.
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Re: Any poets here?
« Reply #16 on: July 14, 2011, 04:34:20 AM »
Quote from: CMF on July 13, 2011, 06:12:53 PM
Smokes, judging by this poem alone, your son has the dangerous potential of becoming a poet.

Perhaps, but he is quite logical about things (ie; he researched all the vitamins in food first) which made this piece a bit like painting by numbers. While that is extraordinary and commendable, I do try and get him to write from his heart and off the top of his head which he finds more difficult (as do I). He is still only 8 though and his mother is very incredibly creative so hopefully that'll rub off on him.

Merci mille fois for the compliment though CMF, I will show him your post as soon as he gets in - he'll be jumping with joy I bet.
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Re: Any poets here?
« Reply #17 on: July 14, 2011, 08:36:40 AM »
Quote from: CMF on July 13, 2011, 06:12:53 PM
Smokes, judging by this poem alone, your son has the dangerous potential of becoming a poet.

Agreed 1000%
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Re: Any poets here?
« Reply #18 on: September 06, 2011, 10:35:26 PM »
Quote from: dweez on July 03, 2011, 02:25:19 PM
I'll try to find the poem I wrote for my old girlfriend who later become my ex-wife.  I know I have it somewhere.

Ha, found a hard copy of it in my files.  It's written in prose so don't expect any spectacular rhyming or nuffin!

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Image at Dawn

As the morning rays lick my face, I awake and breathe in her wonder and pause as my mind swoons in her beauty.  The sun lightly trickles down her face, as if it were afraid to mar such alluring grace for fear of being doused in shame.  Her hair, reflecting the beams in a myriad of hues, causes a spectrum of rouge and crimson to dazzle my eyes, forcing me to blink, afraid that if I do this angel will spirit away leaving me empty and wanting.  The striking hues of her locks, drawing me to her, are contrasted by the soft petals that are her cheeks.  As I reach out to caress the supple skin the thought of an angel again enters my mind.  I tense in surprise as, expecting to pass through her like a billowing cloud, my arms surround her gentle frame.  As I hold her near, I sense an esoteric vigor that belies her delicate stature.

I am now complete.

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Re: Any poets here?
« Reply #19 on: September 07, 2011, 12:32:19 AM »
very nice work
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Re: Any poets here?
« Reply #20 on: September 08, 2011, 10:16:51 AM »
Awww Dweez, you are a soppy git.

What's "empting" by the way?
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Re: Any poets here?
« Reply #21 on: September 08, 2011, 11:37:13 AM »
Oops, typo...fixt.
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